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If this house is a book
Two adults pace the passages they carved with pens, editing.
Once glossy pages are dampened-
Anecdotes drip down the spine, stealing foundation and blockading
the heart of the story

If this house is a book
One day it will be censored by conformity
the motives changed
the meaning tainted
the saucy metaphors will be laced with normalcy and I will have to squint to live one letter at a time

If this house is a book
Two adults are fighting for authorship
black ink is blotting
cheap, archaic verbs
are dotting out perceptions that
had come out once as harmonic

If this house is a book
We do not believe that the princess gets her kiss
she dies, cold, the color fading from her cheeks and her last bit of hope is sliced swiftly,
fast through the artery.
Her last few lines draw blue blood.

If only this house were a book,
I could keep it locked away
So that in years many might scower the pages and note-

I'm glad my house is not a book.
©2004-2009 ~solitarysilence
:iconsolitarysilence:

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A house is not a home, nor a book

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:iconphoenixtx:
i really like the second verse. the imagery is great. just... two things...
the second verse, last line, i think could be broken down into two/three lines, to lend a greater effect.
i also feel that the ending is a bit weak.
otherwise, nice job :)

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found religion inside myself
i drank the blood, the flesh was stale
:iconbeth004:
This is very creative book... I like the sentance "Two adults are fighting for authorship" That is completely true... but I do feel as if you held back in this... each word was thoroughly though out and planted with a careful seed... almost like it was written for a school paper or something... but it might be just me trying to break the rythmn and it have my kind of poetry (a bunch of thoughts just thrown on the paper without any recall of scale or any kind of organization) So I'm just rambling...

High five! It's a good poem... It's a fav!!!

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==================:sun:==================
"The weaker beings kill themselves off before anyone else gets a chance." -Me
:icontigertess:
Wonderful poem, just outstanding. The ending stanza/phrase is a little confusing as to who is saying what... I took it to mean that if your house was a book instead of being reality, you could lock it up and then many years later people would say that they were glad their houses were not books... is that what you meant? =P I am very interested in your work! Welcome to my watch, and here's a belated welcoming hug :hug:. Cheers~

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Tess ,'o-)

~LPSworkshop critic

Good Poets-
~fae, ~driftwood, *xpapertigersx
My clubs-
~livingpoetsociety
:iconlovesrequiem420:
Oh my god, I loved it... I can't say why, theres just something about it.. the imagery.. Its a :+fav: !

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Heaven's not a place that you go when you die, it's that moment in life when you actually feel Alive.
:iconakar:
oh.. such a beautiful poem. i wish i could make something like that.
:icondamnastica:
This definitely is good poetry. I wonder tho if not all of life in a sense is fiction, or whether real-estate agents in fact do not read houses and bring them down to a number according to a reversal of the 'couldbe-principle' that all of life is fiction. I like it when a piece makes me think.

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